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You in terms of Me by ~Boris012:iconBoris012:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Ballad


You are the star in the sky
To guide me through the night
I give you my hope
To bring me to light

You're the flower in the field
You're the spice in that patch
Bringing colors and beauty
No others can match

You're the beat in the song
That one little thing
That picks up the tempo
And gives it a swing

The happiness on a bad day
The cool waters flowing with the wave
The smiling face in a strange crowd
The bright sun shining through a cloud

You're what life is lived for.
©2006-2009 ~Boris012
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There it is. Nothing to say.

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~Sucre-Glace-Reine Dec 8, 2006, 7:45:32 AM
Very brilliant my brother...although I must say, the fact that you changed your pattern for the last stanza is a bit annoying. Is there a meaning behind it or could you not think of anything that rhymes with wave that fit too? Over all good job...very peaceful vibe. I like it alot.

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"When life gives you lemons, say: "I like lemons, what else have ya' got?" ~someone famous.
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~Boris012 Dec 8, 2006, 11:06:21 AM
It's supposed to keep reiterating the same point, but with less of the description

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The Taj Mahal is like an eternal teardrop on the cheek of time - Rabindranath Tagore
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~Konrad-Bongard Dec 8, 2006, 12:50:04 PM
"Brilliant?" This is pretty bad.

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It ought to be illegal for an artist to marry. If the artist must marry let him find someone more interested in art, or his art, or the artist part of him, than in him. After which let them take tea together three times a week.
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~shiro-nacht Dec 10, 2006, 2:07:09 PM
I hate it when any schmo can write poetry...mine sucks. This is okay, but nothing sticks out...it kinda sounds like a crappy love song.

Sorry to be brutal, but it's true.

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Now know as ~typospaz
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~Boris012 Dec 10, 2006, 11:49:57 PM
surprisingly, non taken. I don't claim to be a master at poetry (like that guy ^), but I just try it out once in a while.

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The Taj Mahal is like an eternal teardrop on the cheek of time - Rabindranath Tagore
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~shiro-nacht Dec 11, 2006, 2:24:55 PM
Yeah, sometimes it's good to let it out. I hate over-cirts, like above mentioned. You never said it was le best....

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Now know as ~typospaz
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